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As is vividly depicted in the picture, a father has received a letter from his son, on which without anything except(改为but)a word: money. It reveals a serious issue of (改为in)our society: more and more people live off their parents, even if they are old enough. We call the people who is(建议删掉，直接用简单句表达即可) "boomerang kids”.A careful analysis of cartoon may reveals some reasons under the problem, which involves three causes. For one thing,Chinese parents indulge their children so that it takesfew(改为little，few修饰可数名词，little修饰不可数名词) time to develop their children(改为children’s，孩子们的) independence. In addition(建议改为For another，与前面For one thing对应起来), the boomerang kids may never realize the hard working and enterprising spirit is(改为are，宾语从句的主语用and连接，谓语动词用复数)a magic weapon to make their life pleasant, efficient ,(加and)successful. Last but not least, the education in our school ,especailly(拼写错误，改为especially)university, attach(改为attaches) more importance to academic marks, which ignores the significance of students’ independence ablilty(拼写错误，改为ability).In order to solve these issues, both family and school should join hands to create an free atmosphere to spirit the young people take care of themselves, while at the same time, the boomerang kids(改为kids’) efforts are indispensible, (加and，两个句子之间用连词连接)they should change the lazy behaviors. To conclude my essay, I would like to quote an old saying “a young idler, an old beggar”.
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