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As is vividly depicted in the picture, a father has received a letter from his son, on which without anything except(改为but)a word: money. It reveals a serious issue of (改为in)our society: more and more people live off their parents, even if they are old enough. We call the people who is(建议删掉，直接用简单句表达即可) “boomerang kids”.A careful analysis of cartoon may reveals some reasons under the problem, which involves three causes. For one thing,Chinese parents indulge their children so that it takesfew(改为little，few修饰可数名词，little修饰不可数名词) time to develop their children(改为children’s，孩子们的) independence. In addition(建议改为For another，与前面For one thing对应起来), the boomerang kids may never realize the hard working and enterprising spirit is(改为are，宾语从句的主语用and连接，谓语动词用复数)a magic weapon to make their life pleasant, efficient ,(加and)successful. Last but not least, the education in our school ,especailly(拼写错误，改为especially)university, attach(改为attaches) more importance to academic marks, which ignores the significance of students’ independence ablilty(拼写错误，改为ability).In order to solve these issues, both family and school should join hands to create an free atmosphere to spirit the young people take care of themselves, while at the same time, the boomerang kids(改为kids’) efforts are indispensible, (加and，两个句子之间用连词连接)they s...
12-10
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As is subtly portrayed in the drawing, the picture on the left illustrates a young boy wrote(改为writing或者with) a famous football player'(加s,即player’s) name,(去掉)——Beckham ,(去掉) on his face, (句子较复杂，可改为a young boy has the word “Beckham ”,the name of a famous football player, written on his face) and the other picture on the right illustrates a young man who wants to have a hair style of Beckham and spends on 300RMB(改为which needs 300RMB). These pictures illustrate(加 that)the worship of star(改为the stars，或把整体改为idol-worshipping) is popular in the modern society.There are some factors contribute(改为contributing) to this phenomenon. The first factor(加is) that the ideology of young individuals in modern society is not independence(改为independent, independence是名词) . They do not know that(去掉) what is worth to hold (改为what to hold)and what is(去掉) they really want or need. The second factor(加is) that the atmosphere of the modern society is not verybenefit(改为beneficial，benefit是动词) to the development of young folks. With the dissemination of TVs, magazines,(去掉) and so forth, the environment of worship of star(改为idol-worshipping) is increasing popularity(改为becoming increasingly popular). So it can influence young person(加s) always and everywhere.In my point of view, the preference of individual, there is no one right or wrong choice(句式混乱，改为there’s no...
12-10
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AS Is(注意大小写) shown above,a funny hen claimed that her eggs with(that后面应该跟的是从句，从句中应包含谓语动词，建议将with改为have) no edge and the like which is the most fundamntional(拼写错误，改为fundamental).(作者这句话是要表达什么内容?)Simple as the drawing is ,the symbolic meaning behind ti(改为it) is as deep as ocean(注意句末标点)The honest is not only necessary,but also indepensible(拼写错误，改为indispensable).As the old Chinese proverb says."Honest is gold."However,in no country other than China,it has been said that,the problum(拼写错误，改为problem) of opposite the pormise(拼写错误，改为promise) more serious(句子逻辑关系不明确，改为the opposite of the original promise is more serious) ,and people fail to attach attention to the "gold".Individuals and organizations can make money,take porfits(拼写错误，改为profits) and even obtain wealth by attend promise.To be honest can also have added (改为add) benefit of increasing one's knowledge,giving us a new perspective of outside world.According to a survey conducted by China Acadmy(拼写错误，改为Academy)of Science(CAS),honest can relieve not only pressure but also anxiety and such problums(拼写错误，改为problems)as depression,stress,isolation and solitude(注意句末标点)All in all,obtain(改为obtaining，一句话中只能有一个谓语动词)the promise plays a key role in our daily life.The unhonest(改为dishonest，表示“不诚实的”，没有unhonest一词), in view of the complexity of such issue,we must treat it socially,economically and cu...
12-10
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As is vividly unfolded in the caricature,A(改为a) little boy is required to finish reading a mass of books which are even higher than his height by his father(此处作者想用by his father表达什么含义?建议去掉),whose facial expression implies that he is rather unwilling and distressed.in(改为In) the picture,there is a book called Early-MBA.genarally,It is(注意标点及大小写的正确使用，建议作者改为“, which is generally”)read by adults.the(首字母大写) drawer aims to reveal a symbolic meaning that parents should cultivate children according to his(改为their) aptitude,instead of blind notion of education.In contemporary society,the number of students who suffer from cram school(改为schools) and the pressure of their parents(句子层次混乱，建议加“, which改为定语从句”)has increased at an alarming rate.Careful deliberation of this phenomenon has illustrated me on why this should be so(表达不准确，改为There are numerous reasons why exists this phenomenon, and I would explore only a few of the most important ones here).Fierce competition,in the first place,constitues(拼写错误，改为consists) one of the primary reasons.According to a recent survey made by sina,there are one million students choose to pursue a master degree after graduation.Attending cram school(改为schools) will lay a foundation for future development.Convergent thinking existing in the society is also the breeding ground for this trend.This undesirable genera...
12-10
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From the picture above we can see that there are three trees in the picture, and one of them is growing very strongly.(用一般现在时，且strongly运用不合适。可改为one of them grows very well) However, the other two trees (去掉)look like very small. If you take a(去掉) careful notice, you’ll find that a tree has become bend(bent) because of (去掉，因为后面是个句子)the big tree hostile his development. (the big tree holds back its growth)The drawer(drawer是抽屉的意思，painter) of the image aims at revealing a common phenomenon in our country, children today are generally spoiled. There are two major reasons for the problem. On one hand, as the reform of population policy, most families are allowed(加to have)only one child who is usually regarded as the ‘apple’ of parent’s(parents’) eye. Therefore, parents are always try (trying) their best to provide their child with everything they want. On the other hand, lacking the awareness of bearing hardships is also an important reason that can not be ignored.I think it is imperative that we should take some effective measures. To begin with, our government can modify the policy that allows families to raise more than one students(child). In addition, the most (加effective或者important之类的形容词) measure of all is that we should cultivate the sense of dependent. Only in this way, can we meliorate the problem in the near future.
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12-10
写作原文
In the given picture, there are many parents standing the gate of (outside)the examination room. As we see, they are so worried that the sweat began (begin)to pour down their face. In china, it is common knowledge that the exam decides (may determine)the future of children. Hence, it reflects the problem that the (加上current Chinese表意更完整)educational system is unreasonable.In fact, the problem has existed for several years. Especially in china, the examination score decides the children’s development in the future.(语法正确，但句意不合理。改为the examination score may influence children’s future development.)In a sense, the examination seems to be the only standard that chooses the talents(can be used to select talents). Furthermore, it is so terrible educational system (the educational system is so terrible). I think we must take some effective measures to solve this problem.In my opinion, I think we should adopt the following measures. On the one hand, we should reform the educational institution and establish a more flexible approach to choose the talent (select talents). On the other hand, parents should give up the idea that the exam is the only key to judge (measure)children’s ability.
总体点评
本文立意正确，内容切题，结构完整,需注意以下问题：1、文章的立意虽然正确，且深入切题，但文章的内容不够丰富充实，原因分析不够深刻。第二段在分析造成现象的时候提出了三点“考试决定孩子的未来”“考试是选拔人才的唯一标准”“教育制度很差”——“考试为什么会决定孩子的...
12-10
写作原文
In the given picture, there are many parents standing the gate of (outside)the examination room. As we see, they are so worried that the sweat began (begin)to pour down their face. In china, it is common knowledge that the exam decides (may determine)the future of children. Hence, it reflects the problem that the (加上current Chinese表意更完整)educational system is unreasonable.In fact, the problem has existed for several years. Especially in china, the examination score decides the children’s development in the future.(语法正确，但句意不合理。改为the examination score may influence children’s future development.)In a sense, the examination seems to be the only standard that chooses the talents(can be used to select talents). Furthermore, it is so terrible educational system (the educational system is so terrible). I think we must take some effective measures to solve this problem.In my opinion, I think we should adopt the following measures. On the one hand, we should reform the educational institution and establish a more flexible approach to choose the talent (select talents). On the other hand, parents should give up the idea that the exam is the only key to judge (measure)children’s ability.
总体点评
本文立意正确，内容切题，结构完整,需注意以下问题：1、文章的立意虽然正确，且深入切题，但文章的内容不够丰富充实，原因分析不够深刻。第二段在分析造成现象的时候提出了三点“考试决定孩子的未来”“考试是选拔人才的唯一标准”“教育制度很差”——“考试为什么会决定孩子的...
12-10
写作原文
In the far-reaching picture, a (an)emperor is served with coffee by a eunuch who is holding a tray on his head and saying”Your majesty，coffee time, please.”The picture wants to convey the communication between Chinese and Western cultures.More than 100 years ago, when China was still in the Qing dynasty, the government carried out the “closing door” (closed door)policy which meant cutting down any kind of communication with foreigners. As a consequence, the power of the country had been falling down gradually and less than half of (加the)land was controlled by foreign countries. The people’s living conditions were low(hard). Whereas, after 100 years when Chinese leader Deng Xiaoping developed and carried out the “opening up” policy( reform and opening-up policy), the appearance of China began to convert.(语法正确，但为中式思维。可改为：China began to emerge with a new visage in the East.) As we all know, China’s GDP has already ranked the second all over the world, and the living conditions among people are much better than those in Qing dynasty. Obviously, the communication between China(Chinese)and Western culture has changed China forever.Nowadays, many people have already realized that we should take the essence and discard the dregs. I wanna(多用于口语中，在写作中应使用正式的表达方式，改为want to) emphasize that all of us must do as what we say, and the future is bright.
总体点评
12-10
写作原文
What a thought-provoking picture. (!)In the picture, although setting(sitting) on(改为around，用on意为“坐在桌子上”) the same table for dinner, people are completely absorbed in their mobile phones, and they are communicating with others through QQ, playing games and purchasing in the online shop(汉式思维，改为shopping online).Undoubtedly, the drawer(painter，drawer是“抽屉”) of the cartoon reveals a common phenomenon that mobile phones in our life is becoming so important that people generate the increasingly serious emotions of dependence on it. (首先，可以直接用the cartoon reveals…;其次，so important that后面的句子语法错误，语句不通。可改为：the cartoon reveals a common phenomenon that mobile phones are playing a more and more important role that people can’t live without them.)Various reasons result in the problem. On one hand, with the Price of cell phones declining(语序错误，with the declining of cell phones’ price), the majority of people have (加the) ability to purchase mobiles phones. For example, everyone in China possess(单三，加es)a phone. On the other hand, with the development of technology, the function of mobile phone is becoming very strong(中式思维，改为powerful), and more and more people are fascinated with its diversion(应为“消遣功能”，加function) .And above all, modern people are always too boring and exhausted, and they need somethings(something)such as cell phones to relieve pressure. Ultimately, many peopl...
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